When I'm gone, I hope that someone can acknowledge that I was once here.
E.E.R. Cohen
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jamriot
This was so cool! I especially liked the last third of this piece. I think you did a great job in such a short space explaining the extent of "eternity" in the nonchalant way Nibiru would. Overall, really strong characterization! I do wish you would've done a bit more with the devil's appearance since you already went far enough to describe its feminine form, its clothing, and even assigned the name Nicole to this form. Hearing a bit more about the devil's movements and existence in this plane would've added more depth, but I still think you made a great piece with the word count you landed at, thank you for participating!
OnceHere (Updated )
Thanks! I hope you noticed how their names connect with the story. Anyway, I'm happy you like it!